Dawn Eclipse chapter 1?

dunno how many time I've turn & edit the story in my head so im just gonna give chapter 1 roughly in point form since writing in novel form is a pain in the ass...

• Jericho one day goes out to sea early in the morning to go pearl-fishing
• on the seabed, he found Zayne's Fragment and picked it up then the fragment like...pursues him (through telekinesis), what it said to him goes something like this:

"I see that you are frail. A listless lust for power consumes you. Why not get embraced by the arms of the forbidden? My name is [*****]. Let me grant you the strength to corrupt the boredom of this world. In return I only ask for-----"

• before it can finish it sentence, Jericho got interrupted (and drops the fragment)
• after he retrieve it again, the fragment stop communicating w/ him so he dismissed what happened earlier
• a group of somebody saw it and took it away from him & shows it off. Jericho felt helpless (he was pinned down), his hatred started to stir, the fragment then says to him: "Go ahead, choose..."
• (with the power of the fragment) he tears them up.

"the long forgotten feelings of vengence was invoked"

so anyways, there you have it :) edit it as u wish~hahahaahhaha

btw, i've also consider him to be a coal miner (or any jobs tht consists of extractings, low pay, and bad conditions) but finally choose pearl-fisher bcus....if u commit a murder (or in Jericho's case, murders) and u're at the sea, you can just say that nature took 'em..unless of course, someone saw u...

but honestly im still debating whether he should be a pearl-fisher or a coal miner...advices, anyone?

Take a break...Not! more ideas for DE

...b4 i continue

• Jericho collects the fragments > when the last piece is collected, the evil emperor is revived
• Each fragment have its own individual power

Zayne's Fragment = Strength [Encavhine unlock]

Tharali's Fragment = Wisdom [allows summoning (or magic too)/obtains the Eclipse Gauntlet]

Kaemus' Fragment = Endurance [obtains the Axe of Neverise(from fighting the seal guardian)/Brutagan unlock]

Griff's Fragment = Dexterity(?) [Nuhtrac unlock]

Elisja's Fragment = Diligence [emperor's revival]

• The evil emperor's name would be "Krobis"(thou i dun think his name is important but just in case)
• The betrayer comes in (sometime) after Griff's Fragment is obtained

and one request : can someone design the fragments? (along w/ its complete form)

Anyways feel free to ask any questions or edit any parts~~~

Dawn Eclipse Prologue

‘Once upon a time, there was an evil emperor who ruled the lands. The emperor detested the Light and with the power of Darkness, blocked every source of light, including the sun. People called it the Dawn Eclipse era as there was neither a glimmer of light nor hope for the people who lived in constant fear and despair. Until one day, 5 travelling heroes made an alliance in order to rid the emperor. Griff, Zayne, Tharali, Elisja & Kaemus were their names.
Day after day, the heroes frantically fought their way through the castle. Finally, with the will and determination of the five, the evil emperor had been slain. His powers sealed away and separated into fragments. The heroes each protected a fragment so that if the evil emperor were to be resurrected, such power would not fall into the wrong hands.
After the event, peace and light have been restored to the lands and the party was disbanded. However it was not all it seems. For one day, Zayne, fell into greed and used its power for his own biddings. Chaos had spread once more into the world. The remaining four joined hands once more to take down the corrupted man.
Together, the four easily obtained the upper hand of their fight against Zayne. But before the last blow was dealt, Zayne somehow manage to escape with his life. What happen from then on was anyone’s guess. Some say he eventually received heavenly punishment. Others say the darkness consumed him…’

This legend was told and retold to generations after generations. However, it wasn’t just a legend…

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Chapter 1 is underway!! pls look forward to it ^^ (but not too much..hehe /swt)

Ilisa

Name: Ilisa
Age: 21
Occupation: Farmer
Likes: Farming, eating, crapping, dreams of conquering the world, ipod nano (red), jacuzzi
Dislikes: Cows (prefers buffalo), long hair, fancy clothes, coke.
Preferred songs: Chickens clucking 'Ode to joy' (chickens are trained to do so)
Weapon(s) of choice: Parang and Rake

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P/s: Kyo, you can start putting her into your story. Her characteristics can be written anyhow based on the stuff up there. She's prolly the bad guy. Lol.

The Minions

Finally I'm done wif the minions..
I hope u ladies will like it..
Its a rough work..
I tried my best to make it as tidy as possible..
So easier for u gals to see..

They are called "The Esplice"
They can be summon and unsummon..
They eat any souls as breakfast!
Their mouth are sidewayz..
And they can talk human language!

The warrior is called Encavhine
It is fast and moderate strong...
It is well balance wif sword and shield..
Click Here to View Encavhine

The defender is called Brutagan
It is not fast but very strong (slow attack speed)
It is the best defender among all..
Mostly is used for blocking attacks.. Even magic..
Right hand is for grabbing only..
Click Here to View Brutagan

The archer is called Nuhtrac
It is very fast but not strong..
It has very long sight...
And able to shoot down enemies from afar..
It has only 3 eyes..
Click Here to View Nuhtrac

To see how big they are..
Click here to See It

Hope u all like it..
O yea, feel free to edit it..

Embrace your Dreams..

DE updates

yosh! i've thought of some parts of story for DE~~~ it goes like this--

the reason Jericho (the anti-hero) wants the world for himself: traumatic childhood; keep getting abused, bullied etc. so he wants to get back at them (muahahaha)

Climax

at the peak of his plans, Jericho gets backstab by his own "ally"(or allies), his left arm gets cut off and his gauntlet gets stolen

*later his left arm would be replaced w/ a prosthetic one

so he swears revenge!!! but while taking it back or fighting w/ the betrayer, the gauntlet evolve into a huge mob(boss) so they have no choice but to kill it

........sounds like a vdo game story XD
anyways here are my characters :
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but i havent decide on which side they r on and their ages r....younger thn Jericho?

and some editings on Jericho :
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hope it's ok, Chaos >.<

The Anti Hero

I'm done wif the "hero" of Dawn Eclipse...
The hero should be 24 years old...
Not too young not too old.. Kekeke..
Anyway.. He wans to take control of de world..
Activated some ancient artifact brings de "Eclipse"
Unleashing some special and destructive creature..
Under his control wif tat gauntlet..
But he didnt noe it'll unleash some other things..
Demons, Monsters, Vampire and etc.
(Vampire is coz nite forever!)
So he accidentally save de world
instead of doing pure evil things...

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Juz an idea.. Feel free to edit it..
And also the drawing...
Only Dawners Artist member of course..
Its juz idea for Kyo-san..
Kekekekeke~

Embrace your Dreams..